Thanks, Joy,
The statement is massively improved. I added a few more comments. 

I would still like to get rid of the idea that "Consideration of applications for new TLDs should be mindful of sensitivities." Any such consideration constitutes a restraint on freedom of expression and while de facto the board and GAC will be mindful they don't need any help or encouragement from us. 
 
My only major concern pertains to the "Guardianship" principle - where the heck did that come from, and why are we recycling ancient RFCs drafted by computer scientists pretending to be global legislators? And why, how, who and when did that principle get elevated to the Master Principle that subordinates all the others, including Human Rights and Equity????

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> Of joy
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> Subject: Re: [NCSG-Discuss] NCUC input on new gTLDs and human rights
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> Hi again - a revised draft is now available here:
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/17ijURQYy1uKh27NyDEWh_V1zhCDCI
> vVtdzUEJLaNmyE/edit
> 
> To comment and to view all comments please click on the "comment" link.
> Previous comments are marked as resolved where these have been
> incorporated directly into or otherwise included in the draft. The one
> issue that was not moving towards agreement was removed (this was in
> relation to generic gTLDs).
> Any additional comments on issues that may have been missed such as
> IDNs or any other general human rights issues?
> Please make any comments by Friday 10th so that this can be finalised
> by Saturday 11th.
> Finally, given that NPOC members have also commented on this should it
> now be submitted as a NCSG comment?
> Thanks again to those who have commented so far.
> 
> Joy
> 
> 
> On 6/08/2012 4:11 p.m., joy wrote:
> > Hi again - thanks for the on-going discussion on the google
> > document. We have some areas of consensus and some of on-going
> > debate, but no new issues in the last few days. On that basis I
> > will prepare a more detailed draft suitable for submission and
> > circulate this to the list aroudn Wednesday this week. Comments are
> > due no later than Sunday 12 August. cheers
> >
> > Joy
> >
> > On 27/07/2012 1:54 a.m., Carlos A. Afonso wrote:
> >> I see only one "anonymous" comment: "This is wrong, and is a
> >> claim that has no basis in competition law or economics." Is this
> >> it?
> >
> >> --c.a.
> >
> >> On 07/26/2012 06:05 AM, Milton L Mueller wrote:
> >>> I made some comments. I have some serious problems with two of
> >>> the things in the statement as it now stands:
> >>>
> >>>> -----Original Message----- From: NCSG-Discuss
> >>>> [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of joy
> >>>> Sent: Thursday, July 26, 2012 1:08 AM To:
> >>>> [log in to unmask] Subject: [NCSG-Discuss] NCUC
> >>>> input on new gTLDs and human rights
> >>>>
> >>> Hi all - following on from the NCUC discussions on this list
> >>> and at the recent meeting in Prague, NCUC agreed to develop a
> >>> comment on new gTLDs and human rights. The open comment period
> >>> closes on 12 August. To start discussion on the comment I've
> >>> prepared a draft outline of some key points that can be
> >>> developed with inputs from those interested. To do so I've
> >>> created a google doc which anyone can view and comment on by
> >>> clicking the comment link here:
> >>>
> >>>
> https://docs.google.com/document/d/17ijURQYy1uKh27NyDEWh_V1zhCDCI
> vVtdzUE
> >>>
> >>>
> >
> >>>
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> >>>
> >>> You do not need a google account to view and comment on this.
> >>> I will be monitoring the comments periodically and helping NCUC
> >>> to update the comment by the deadline.
> >>>
> >>> Thanks to those who expressed interest in supporting this
> >>> initiative.
> >>>
> >>> Joy
> >>>
> >>>
> >
> >
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