Fantastic work Kathy! Surely we don’t want to introduce the ‘ICANN defense’ into the international legal vernacular (‘Sorry your honour,  ICANN made me do it!’).
 
Two minor suggestions:
 
1. The NCSG is much more than mere organizations; we’re also the home of individual noncommercial users within the GNSO. Perhaps we could reflect that in the introduction, such as:
 
The Noncommercial Stakeholders Group represents noncommercial organizations and individual noncommercial users in their work in the policy and proceedings of ICANN and the GNSO.
 
2. As the third “triggering event” you have, in part, “Receipt of a written legal opinion from a nationally recognized law firm in the applicable jurisdiction”. 
 
Here in the United Kingdom some of the most prominent solicitors practicing in both the cyber and privacy realms are solo practitioners, often practicing in combination with a part time lecturing career. Think of, for example, Jeremy Phillips. I’d hate to give the big law firms any advantage over the equally qualified solicitor or barrister who does not belong to a firm. Consider, perhaps amending the statement, as such:
 
Receipt of a written legal opinion from a nationally recognized law firm or qualified legal practitioner in the applicable jurisdiction.

Thanks for considering and thanks again, Kathy, for all of this. It’s really great work!
 
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From: Kathy Kleiman <[log in to unmask]>
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Date: Tue, 29 Jul 2014 13:44:44 -0400
Subject: Draft Comments for Whois Proceeding
 
To Rafik, NCSG Executive Committee and NCSG Membership,
There is an important, but very quiet comment proceeding that has been taking place this summer. It is the Review of the ICANN Procedure for Handling WHOIS Conflicts with Privacy Law at https://www.icann.org/public-comments/whois-conflicts-procedure-2014-05-22-en
Stephanie put out a call for comments, and not seeing any, I drafted these.  It has been dismayeding ever since ICANN adopted its Consensus Procedure for Handling WHOIS Conflicts with Privacy law -- because it basically requires that Registrars and Registries have to be sued or receive an official notice of violation before they can ask ICANN for a waiver of the Whois requirements. That always seemed very unfair- that you have to be exposed to allegation of illegal activity in order to protect yourself or your Registrants under your national data protection and privacy laws.
In the more recent Data Retention Specification, of the 2013 RAA, ICANN Staff and Lawyers saw this problem and corrected it -- now Registrars can be much more pro-active in showing ICANN that a certain clause in their contract (e.g., extended data retention) is a clear violation of their national law (e.g., more limited data retention).
So to this important comment proceeding, I drafted these comments for us to submit. As Reply Comments (during the Reply Period), we are asked to respond to other commenters. That's easy as the European Commission and Registrar Blacknight submitted useful comments.
Rafik, can we edit, finalize and submit by the deadline on Friday?  Comments below and attached. If you have edits, in the interest of time, kindly suggest alternate language. Tx!!
Best,
Kathy
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DRAFT NCSG Response to the Questions of the
Review of the ICANN Procedure for Handling WHOIS Conflicts with Privacy Law
https://www.icann.org/public-comments/whois-conflicts-procedure-2014-05-22-en
Introduction
The Noncommercial Stakeholders Group represents noncommercial organizations in their work in the policy and proceedings of ICANN and the GNSO. We respectfully submit as an opening premise that every legal business has the right and obligation to operate within the bounds and limits of its national laws and regulations. No legal business establishes itself to violate the law; and to do so is an invitation to civil and criminal penalties. ICANN Registries and Registrars are no different – they want and need to abide by their laws.
Thus, it is timely for ICANN to raise the questions of this proceeding, Review of the ICANN Procedure for Handling WHOIS Conflicts with Privacy Law (albeit at a busy time for the Community and at the height of summer; we expect to see more interest in this time towards the Fall). We submit these comments in response to the issues raises and the questions asked.
Background
The ICANN Procedure for Handling Whois Conflicts with Privacy Law was adopted in 2006 after years of debate on Whois issues. This Consensus Procedure was the first step of recognition that data protection laws and privacy law DO apply to the personal and sensitive data being collected by Registries and Registrars for the Whois database.
But for those of us in the Noncommercial Users Constituency (now part of the Noncommercial Stakeholders Group/NCSG) who helped debate, draft and adopt this Consensus Procedure in the mid-2000s, we were always shocked that the ICANN Community did not do more. At the time, multiple Whois Task Forces were at work with multiple proposals which include important and pro-active suggestions to allow Registrars and Registries to come into compliance with their national data protection and privacy laws.
At the time, we never expected this Consensus Procedure to be an end itself – but the first step of many steps. It was an “end” for too long, so we are glad the discussion is reopened and once again we seek to allow Registrars and Registries to be in full compliance with their national data protection and privacy laws – from the moment they enter into their contracts with ICANN.
II. Data Protection and Privacy Laws – A Quick Overview of the Principles that Protect the Personal and Sensitive Data of Individuals and Organizations/Small Businesses
[Stephanie, Tamir or Others with Expertise in Canadian and European Data Protection Laws may choose to add something here].
III. Questions asked of the Community in this Proceeding
The ICANN Review Paper raised a number of excellent questions. In keeping with the requirements of a Reply Period, these NCSG comments will address both our comments and those comments we particularly support in this proceeding.
    1. Is it impractical for ICANN to require that a contracted party already has litigation or a government proceeding initiated against it prior to being able to invoke the Whois Procedure?
1.1 Response: Yes, it is completely impractical (and ill-advised) to force a company to violate a national law as a condition of complying with that national law. Every lawyer advises businesses to comply with the laws and regulations of their field. To do otherwise is to face fines, penalties, loss of the business, even jail for officers and directors. Legal business strives to be law-abiding; no officer or director wants to go to jail for her company's violations. It is the essence of an attorney's advice to his/her clients to fully comply with the laws and operate clearly within the clear boundaries and limits of laws and regulations, both national, by province or state and local.
In these Reply Comments, we support and encourage ICANN to adopt policies consistent with the initial comments submitted by the European Commission:
We also agree with Blacknight:
 
    1.1a How can the triggering event be meaningfully defined?
1.1 a Response: This is an important question. Rephrased, we might ask together – what must a Registry or Registrar show ICANN in support of its claim that certain provisions involving Whois data violate provisions of national data protection and privacy laws?
NCSG respectfully submits that there are at least four “triggering events” that ICANN should recognize:
 
 
The above list draws from the comments of the European Commission, Data Retention Specification of the 2013 Registrar Accreditation Agreement, and sound compliance and business practices for the ICANN General Counsel's office.
We further agree with Blacknight that the requirements for triggering any review and consideration by ICANN be: simple and straightforward, quick and easy to access.
 
    1.3 Are there any components of the triggering event/notification portion of the RAA's Data Retention waiver process that should be considered as optional for incorporation into a modified Whois Procedure?
 
1.3 Response: Absolutely, the full list in 1.1a above, together with other constructive contributions in the Comments and Reply Comments of this proceeding, should be strongly considered for incorporation into a modified Whois Procedure, or simply written into the contracts of the Registries and Registrars contractual language, or a new Annex or Specification.
We respectfully submit that the obligation of Registries and Registrars to comply with their national laws is not a matter of multistakeholder decision making, but a matter of law and compliance. In this case, we wholeheartedly embrace the concept of building a process together that will allow exceptions for data protection and privacy laws to be adopted quickly and easily.
 
    1.4 Should parties be permitted to invoke the Whois Procedure before contracting with ICANN as a registrar or registry?
 
1.4 Response: Of course, Registries and Registrars should be allowed to invoke the Whois Procedure, or other appropriate annexes and specifications that may be added into Registry and Registrar contracts with ICANN. As discussed above, the right of a legal company to enter into a legal contracts is the most basic of expectations under law.
 
    2.1 Are there other relevant parties who should be included in this step?
 
2.1 Response: We agree with the EC that ICANN should be working as closely with National Data Protection Authorities as they will allow. In light of the overflow of work into these national commissions, and the availability of national experts at law firms, ICANN should also turn to the advice of private experts, such as well-respected law firms who specialize in national data protection laws. The law firm's opinions on these matters would help to guide ICANN's knowledge and evaluation of this important issue.
 
    3.1 How is an agreement reached and published?
3.1 Response. As discussed above, compliance with national law may not be the best matter for negotiation within a multistakeholder process. It really should not be a chose for others to make whether you comply with your national data protection and privacy laws. That said, the process of refining the Consensus Procedure, and adopting new policies and procedures, or simply putting new contract provisions, annexes or specifications into the Registry and Registrar contracts SHOULD be subject to community discussion, notification and review. But once the new process is adopted, we think the new changes, variations, modifications or exceptions of Individual Registries and Registrars need go through a public review and process. The results, however, Should be published for Community notification and review.
 
We note that in conducting the discussion with the Community on the overall or general procedure, policy or contractual changes, ICANN should be assertive in its outreach to the Data Protection Commissioners. Individual and through their organizations, they have offered to help ICANN evaluate this issue numerous times. The Whois Review Team noted the inability of many external bodies to monitor ICANN regularly, but the need for outreach to them by ICANN staff nonetheless:
 
Recommendation 3: Outreach
ICANN should ensure that WHOIS policy issues are accompanied by cross-community
outreach, including outreach to the communities outside of ICANN with a specific
interest in the issues, and an ongoing program for consumer awareness.
This is a critical policy item for such outreach and input.
 
    3.2 If there is an agreed outcome among the relevant parties, should the Board be involved in this procedure?
 
3.2 Response: Clearly, the changing of the procedure, or the adoption of a new policy or new contractual language for Registries and Registrars, Board oversight and review should be involved. But once the new procedure, policy or contractual language is in place, then subsequent individual changes, variations, modifications or exceptions should be handled through the process and ICANN Staff – as the Data Retention Process is handled today.
 
    4.1 Would it be fruitful to incorporate public comment in each of the resolution scenarios?
4.1 Response: We think this question means whether there should be public input on each and every exception? We respectfully submit that the answer is No. Once the new policy, procedure or contractual language is adopted, then the process should kick in and the Registrar/Registry should be allowed to apply for the waiver, modification or revision consistent with its data protection and privacy laws. Of course, once the waiver or modification is granted, the decision should be matter of public record so that other Registries and Registrars in the jurisdiction know and so that the ICANN Community as a whole can monitor this process' implementation and compliance.
Step Five: Public notice
 
    5.2 Is the exemption or modification termed to the length of the agreement? Or is it indefinite as long as the contracted party is located in the jurisdiction in question, or so long as the applicable law is in force.
5.2 Response: We agree with the European Commission in its response, “By logic the exemption or modification shall be in place as long as the party is subject to the jurisdiction in conflict with ICANN rules. If the applicable law was to change, or the contacted party moved to a different jurisdiction, the conditions should be reviewed to assess if the exemption is still justified.” But provided it is the same parties, operating under the same laws, the modification or change should continue through the duration of the relationship between the Registry/Registrar and ICANN.
 
    5.3 Should an exemption or modification based on the same laws and facts then be granted to other affected contracted parties in the same         jurisdiction without invoking the Whois Procedure
5.3 Response. The European Commission in its comments wrote, and we strongly agree: “the same exception should apply to others in the same jurisdiction who can demonstrate that they are in the same situation.” Further, Blacknight wrote and we support: “if ANY registrar in Germany, for example, is granted a waiver based on German law, than ALL registrars based in Germany should receive the same treatment.” Once a national data protection or privacy law is interpreted as requiring and exemption or modification, it should be available to all Registries/Registrars in that country.
Further, we recommend that ICANN should be required to notify each gTLD Registry and Registrar in the same jurisdiction as that of the decision so they will have notice of the change.
We thank ICANN staff for holding this comment period.
Respectfully submitted,
NCSG
 
DRAFT