OK, I have made some minor modifications based on these discussions, the only significant one related to human rights. The new language reads:
The CCWG solicits comments on two different ways of formulating ICANN’s commitment to human rights. Option one expressed ICANN’s commitment “to respect the fundamental
human rights of the exercise of free expression and the free flow of information.” Option 2 expressed ICANN’s commitment more broadly, “Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed to respect internationally recognized fundamental human
rights.”
With one member organization exception, NCSG tends toward support for the second, more general formulation. The first formulation is too limited because other human
rights, such as privacy, are relevant to ICANN policies. We do, however, recognize that a generic reference to human rights might not work as effectively as more specific requirements, and that freedom of expression and privacy are two human rights most directly
relevant to ICANN’s policy activity. Our preference, therefore, would be to formulate the commitment this way:
“Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed to respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights, in particular freedom of expression and privacy.”
I hope the policy committee can approve the whole document and get it submitted to the CCWG public comment period tomorrow.
--MM
From: NCSG-Discuss [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
On Behalf Of William Drake
Sent: Monday, September 7, 2015 7:35 AM
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: [NCSG-Discuss] CCWG comments last call