Good job Matt! Re the last paragraph - I would suggest that you insert the full name /meaning of the of IFR etc and then include the abbreviation "(IFR)" , "(SIFR)" etc . This will assist in clarity for persons not aware of what these abbreviations mean. regards Karel On Fri, Jul 29, 2016 at 3:38 PM, Edward Morris <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Matt, > > This is extremely well done. > > Although I'm comfortable with the specific California statutes cited and > believe I know why they have been I think it would be good to have some > confirmation of my thoughts so support that part of the PC, as well > as the rest. > > This is really great work - thanks so much for doing it. > > Kind Regards, > > Ed > > > > Sent from my iPhone > > On 29 Jul 2016, at 18:03, matthew shears <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > > Hi > > Please find attached proposed draft NCSG comments on the PTI AoI. Thanks > to those who proposed comments. I have tried to account for various views > and inputs. Some of the comments might be considered contentious. > > Consider this a call for consensus. > > For the person who submitted a comment on article 10 please address the > comment in the attached document on Code references - thanks. > > If there are concerns/questions, etc. with this submission please come > back to the list and/or to me, Marilia or David asap. > > Many thanks. > > Matthew > > On 27/07/2016 11:39, matthew shears wrote: > > Hi all > > Please review and add to the comments on the PTI Articles of Incorporation > as I will be wrapping them up tomorrow (the 28th) and circulating for > consensus. > > Thanks! > > Matthew > > On 22/07/2016 16:48, matthew shears wrote: > > Thanks Marilia. > I have set up a google doc for comments/drafting etc.: > > > https://docs.google.com/document/d/19a1YqSnQ-QFBQF1Im0cnHKMeW8RAEBChdJgp6q6wAs4/edit?usp=sharing > > I have entered some additional points on the draft PTI AoI for your > consideration as that is the most imminent deadline. > > Best. > > Matthew > > On 22/07/2016 09:21, Marilia Maciel wrote: > > Dear all, > > In this week's NCSG policy committee call we discussed the upcoming public > comments. The most outstanding issue ahead of us is definitely the post > transition IANA (PTI). There are three upcoming public comment periods > related to this issue: > > 31/07: Draft PTI Articles of Incorporation > > https://www.icann.org/public-comments/draft-pti-articles-incorporation-2016-07-01-en > > 07/08: PTI Governance Documents > > https://www.icann.org/public-comments/pti-governance-documents-2016-07-08-en > > 11/08: Draft PTI Bylaws > https://www.icann.org/public-comments/draft-pti-bylaws-2016-07-12-en > > We agreed that, in order to save time and efforts, the best approach would > be to create an NCSG drafting team to work on these PTI consultations. > Matthew Shears volunteered to be the facilitator, but we definitively need > the inputs and experience of others in our group. Matt will guide us > through the next steps. He already started the conversation about a week > ago (please refer to his previous message below). > > Please step forward if you can assist on this important task. > > All the best wishes, > Marilia > > ---------- Forwarded message ---------- > From: matthew shears <[log in to unmask]> > Date: Thu, Jul 14, 2016 at 1:05 PM > Subject: [PC-NCSG] PTI bylaws - items for possible discussion > To: PC-NCSG <[log in to unmask]> > > > Hi all > Quickly reading through the proposed PTI by-laws (circulated to the CWG > yesterday and on the ICANN website > https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/draft-pti-bylaws-12jul16-en.pdf > ) I note the following (BUT I am sure that I have missed some points worthy > of discussion): > > 1. principal office issue (Art 2) > > "The principal office for the transaction of the business of the > Corporation may be established at any place or places within or without the > State of California by resolution of the Board. The Board may at any > time establish branch or subordinate offices at any place or places where > the Corporation is qualified to transact business." > > Q. Why would the power to determine the principal office of PTI not be > subject to the same rules as for ICANN's place of business - if there is a > change surely the empowered community should have a say, and not just the > PTI Board (assuming Board in the article means PTI Board)? We have the EC > involved significantly in the decision-tree for PTI - why not in > determining its place of business as we do for ICANN itself? > > 2. purpose of PTI (art 3) > > "The specific purpose of the Corporation is to operate exclusively for the > benefit of, to perform the functions of and to carry out the purposes of > the Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (“*ICANN*”)." > > Q. I thought that the purpose of the PTI subsidiary was to perform the > IANA functions pursuant to the inter-company contract established between > ICANN and PTI? > > > 3. Removal of Director (Art 5.6.2) - isn't the first sentence in > contradiction with the other three paras? it says may be removed w/out > cause but then lists the causes.... May be this is just legalese.... > > > 4. Responsibilities of officers (Art 7.6.1) - role of President. Given > that we are suggesting that the Chair of the Board be, as is possible, > nominated to the ICANN Board by the nominating committee - do we really > want the President - who will be an ICANN appointee (typically the manager > of the IANA functions) - to assume the role of Chairperson in the latter's > absence? Why would we not suggest that the other nominating committee > appointed Director be the replacement if the Chair is absent to ensure a > balance of interests/independence? > > These bylaws are now also up for public comment: > > https://www.icann.org/public-comments/draft-pti-bylaws-2016-07-12-en > > Matthew > > -------------- > Matthew Shears > Global Internet Policy and Human Rights > Center for Democracy & Technology (CDT)+ 44 771 2472987 > > > > ------------------------------ > [image: Avast logo] <https://www.avast.com/antivirus> > > This email has been checked for viruses by Avast antivirus software. > www.avast.com <https://www.avast.com/antivirus> > > > _______________________________________________ > PC-NCSG mailing list > [log in to unmask] > http://mailman.ipjustice.org/listinfo/pc-ncsg > > > > > _______________________________________________ > PC-NCSG mailing [log in to unmask]://mailman.ipjustice.org/listinfo/pc-ncsg > > > -- > > -------------- > Matthew Shears > Global Internet Policy and Human Rights > Center for Democracy & Technology (CDT)+ 44 771 2472987 > > > -- > > -------------- > Matthew Shears > Global Internet Policy and Human Rights > Center for Democracy & Technology (CDT)+ 44 771 2472987 > > > -- > > -------------- > Matthew Shears > Global Internet Policy and Human Rights > Center for Democracy & Technology (CDT)+ 44 771 2472987 > > <NCSG comments PTI AoI.docx> > > _______________________________________________ > PC-NCSG mailing list > [log in to unmask] > http://mailman.ipjustice.org/listinfo/pc-ncsg > >