Hi Milton,

thanks for solving the HR language .
On other hand, there is a proposal about DIDP from Michael Karanicolas ,to
be added to our comment, since we would like to work on that in workstream2
and we are having an ad-hoc group of NCSG members interested in this topic.

the proposal is attached. comments and edits are welcome.

Best,

Rafik


2015-09-08 11:28 GMT+09:00 Mueller, Milton L <
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> OK, I have made some minor modifications based on these discussions, the
> only significant one related to human rights. The new language reads:
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> The CCWG solicits comments on two different ways of formulating ICANN’s
> commitment to human rights. Option one expressed ICANN’s commitment “to
> respect the fundamental human rights of the exercise of free expression and
> the free flow of information.” Option 2 expressed ICANN’s commitment more
> broadly, “Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed
> to respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights.”
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> With one member organization exception, NCSG tends toward support for the
> second, more general formulation. The first formulation is too limited
> because other human rights, such as privacy, are relevant to ICANN
> policies. We do, however, recognize that a generic reference to human
> rights might not work as effectively as more specific requirements, and
> that freedom of expression and privacy are two human rights most directly
> relevant to ICANN’s policy activity. Our preference, therefore, would be to
> formulate the commitment this way:
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> “Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed to
> respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights, in particular
> freedom of expression and privacy.”
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> I hope the policy committee can approve the whole document and get it
> submitted to the CCWG public comment period tomorrow.
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> --MM
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> *From:* NCSG-Discuss [mailto:[log in to unmask]] *On Behalf Of
> *William Drake
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> *Subject:* Re: [NCSG-Discuss] CCWG comments last call
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> On Sep 7, 2015, at 11:22 AM, Tapani Tarvainen <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
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> compromise phrasing like "... human rights, in particular
> freedom of expression and privacy" might work.
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> Works for me, per the F2F discussions with other stakeholders since summer
> 2014.
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> Bill
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