Rafik

These are great comments, but since DIDP is Workstream 2 I don’t think it should be included in this round.

This is the final or next-to-final CCWG WS 1 proposal we are commenting on, and we are trying to emphasize some critical aspects of WS1 Proposal that need to be changed. I think it detracts from that a bit to raise DIDP unless there is some decision that will be taken regarding DIDP in this round.



--MM





From: Rafik Dammak [mailto:[log in to unmask]]

Sent: Wednesday, September 9, 2015 10:13 PM

To: Mueller, Milton L

Cc: [log in to unmask]; Michael Karanicolas

Subject: Re: [NCSG-Discuss] Last CCWG comments last call



Hi Milton,



thanks for solving the HR language .

On other hand, there is a proposal about DIDP from Michael Karanicolas ,to be added to our comment, since we would like to work on that in workstream2 and we are having an ad-hoc group of NCSG members interested in this topic.



the proposal is attached. comments and edits are welcome.



Best,



Rafik



2015-09-08 11:28 GMT+09:00 Mueller, Milton L <[log in to unmask]<mailto:[log in to unmask]>>:

OK, I have made some minor modifications based on these discussions, the only significant one related to human rights. The new language reads:



The CCWG solicits comments on two different ways of formulating ICANN’s commitment to human rights. Option one expressed ICANN’s commitment “to respect the fundamental human rights of the exercise of free expression and the free flow of information.” Option 2 expressed ICANN’s commitment more broadly, “Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed to respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights.”



With one member organization exception, NCSG tends toward support for the second, more general formulation. The first formulation is too limited because other human rights, such as privacy, are relevant to ICANN policies. We do, however, recognize that a generic reference to human rights might not work as effectively as more specific requirements, and that freedom of expression and privacy are two human rights most directly relevant to ICANN’s policy activity. Our preference, therefore, would be to formulate the commitment this way:



“Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed to respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights, in particular freedom of expression and privacy.”



I hope the policy committee can approve the whole document and get it submitted to the CCWG public comment period tomorrow.



--MM



From: NCSG-Discuss [mailto:[log in to unmask]<mailto:[log in to unmask]>] On Behalf Of William Drake

Sent: Monday, September 7, 2015 7:35 AM

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On Sep 7, 2015, at 11:22 AM, Tapani Tarvainen <[log in to unmask]<mailto:[log in to unmask]>> wrote:



compromise phrasing like "... human rights, in particular

freedom of expression and privacy" might work.



Works for me, per the F2F discussions with other stakeholders since summer 2014.



Bill